Birbs comments


                                            >Gerard was about to reply, when the third figure, who until now sat in silence tapped a claw tipped finger on a small table nearby.

                                            Why not just "claw" or (even better) "talon" instead of "claw tipped finger"? Something about "fingers" rubs me the wrong way and the claw/talon is the part that does the tapping, after all. Also, I'd have added an extra coma between "silence" and "tapped" but I'm a notorious coma addict.


                                            >Ginerva (NOT Ginevra)

                                            >Four Winds

                                            If this is a Bug reference, it's extremely stealthy.


                                            >(...) idea -” he tipped his head almost imperceptibly towards Gerson, who caught on the gesture and shot him a hateful glare “- she (...)

                                            I'd use a pair of en dashes or em dashes – spaced or unspaced, your choice – but floating hyphens look kind of bad here.


                                            >My eggshell cares about her being ‘good prey.’

                                            Full stop should be outside of the single quotes.


                                            >Respect the group decision.

                                            group's? I'm not certain your sentence was wrong, I've never learned the possessive 's and s' perfectly.


                                            >Still, he made his choice and there was nothing to do now.

                                            The "there was nothing to do now" reads like he's bored by the lack of the things to do. Maybe something like "there was nothing to be done about it now" would highlight what you wanted to show with this sentence?


                                            >Hopefully no one would notice the absence of a single pegasus and even if they did, they have been careful not to leave tracks.

                                            Again, I so hate giving any kind of grammar advice, but having the second "they" refer to a different subject is confusing. ", his pack has been careful (...)" is clearer.

                                            Also, you should add a before the "and even if they did" part.


                                            >And until now his info was always legit.

                                            That's suddenly very informal.


                                            >Also his odd insistence that they needed not worry about her being a pegasus and that she had no means of defending herself.

                                            Starting a sentence with "also" necessitates a coma. Also,  don't know how to put it but it reads like it's a missing a verb. Maybe "There was also hid odd (...)" or "of defending herself seemed very strange."


                                            >the pony ,who tried her best

                                            Fix the space.


                                            >“Be glad little pony.

                                            In dialogue, always add a coma before referring to one of the characters. "Be glad, little pony."


                                            >To Ginerva’s surprise even though she was towering over her, the mare seemed far less intimidated than before.

                                            A coma after "surprise"? Not 100% sure about this one, but I'd put it there. Also, "she" and "her" is a bit confusing, again. "even though she was towering over the amre, her captive seemed (...)"


                                            >“Hmph, whatever, I got better things than waste my time waiting on a dead pony.

                                            One, "I got better things to do than". Two, "wait on someone" sounds like she's serving her in a restaurant. "waiting for a dead pony" would fix that, I think.


                                            >Ginerva stood in stunted silence.

                                            Did you mean "stunned"? "Stunted silence" doesn't seem right.


                                            >Whether it was due to the same instinct that provided their hunting skills and also instilled a sense of camaraderie towards each other or due to the simple fact that they (...)

                                            Consider "that provided them with their hunting skills". And I'd have a coma before the "or due" to separate the two possibilities.


                                            >However, after a few seconds spent like a living statue, he could still not feel any movement and (...)

                                            If the word order here is a stylistic choice, then sure, but for me the "he could still not feel" implies an ability, not the observation.


                                            >He propelled himself higher, careful not to reach the branches and felt the attacker rush past him.

                                            I'd add a coma before "and".


                                            >but he was at least still at his senses.

                                            I have never seen "still be at one's senses" used for saying the subject is not-unconscious. Maybe that's correct, I can't tell for sure.


                                            >"You’ve all did an impeccable job.”

                                            "You've all done". Not sure why, but "You have all did" is certainly wrong.


                                            >"Not to mention, why did you allow them to operate for so long, when I have been giving you reports of their misdeeds for months?

                                            Missing quote at the end of the sentence.


                                            >A knowing smirk sat out on the mare’s lips.

                                            Again, this could be right but I can't recall any other examples of a sentence with a smirk "sitting on" somebody's face. If you think that's alright, leave it as-is but I'd rephrase that.


                                            >It was a sweet laugh, without any malice and yet it sent a shiver down his spine.

                                            Either add an additional coma before "and" or cut the first one.


                                            >making three griffons disappear was already child’s play

                                            "was already a child's play"